C&C
Thesis statement:
Living on campus or off campus is always a hard decision for freshman to make, so it is necessary for us to make a comparision to see what is the best for us.
Topic sentences:
a.The difference of daily life is always the thing we concern about in the first place.
Detail: on campus: more expensive ; convenient cafeteria ; safer
off campus: cheaper ; cook by oneself -->self independence; could be more dangerous.
b.From the perspective of socializing, living on campus or living off campus makes a lot difference.
Detail: on campus: talking to people all over the world and making more friend; have more chance to
get involved with school groups.
off campus:just communicate with people from the same country or in the same house;
waste lots of time on the way home so have less time to participate activities.
c.Of course for some reason living on or off campus both are good choices.
Detail: Both good for study(library lobby or own room); both a challenge for international
students(living with native american or living as a native american)
C&E
Thesis statement:
It will lead to a very bad result if we eat irregularly.
Supporting TS1:
Short of physiological energy is an obvious kickback.
Supporting details: 1 Lack of enough nutrition for the day
2 Lead to some diseases: Tiredness/ Dizziness/ Gastritis
Supporting TS2:
Though few people ever notice, there will be a psychological effect if we do not eat regularly.
Supporting details: 1 Bad memory due to lack of vitamin
2 Change in mental behavior (stressed out)
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Fiona, I think your C&E outline is not a complete version. The thesis statement should have the bad results of the irregular eating, so be more specific about that. Also, I want you to work on the C&C topic, which sounds more interesting. However, before you write on the paper, revise the outline again. Focus on three different categories for living on campus and off campus such as rent fee, accessibility to the school, amenities, and so forth. If you spend more time on brainstorming, then you'll save a lot of time in the long run. :D
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ReplyDeleteThesis statement:
It will lead to a very bad result if we eat irregularly: Short of physiological energy and a psychological effect.
Supporting TS1:
Short of physiological energy is an obvious kickback.
Supporting details: 1 Lack of enough nutrition for the day
2 Lead to some diseases: Tiredness/ Dizziness/ Gastritis
Supporting TS2:
Though few people ever notice, there will be a psychological effect if we do not eat regularly.
Supporting details: 1 Bad memory due to lack of vitamin
2 Change in mental behavior (stressed out)
Much better! :D
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